TOLKIEN POEMS (just wanted to post mine)

Courtman14
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TOLKIEN POEMS (just wanted to post mine)

Post#1 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

heres an epic poem i wrote on Beren

[u]Erchamion[/u]

Here is sung of Beren the Lost
Of what became his albatross
A deathly bane ensnared his life
Like a sickly plague, brought him strife

This great son of Barahir
Had sworn to steal a silmaril
To win the fairest of all things with breath
Lúthien, a maiden who walked free of death

The maiden roamed free in her wood
A guarded realm, great evil it withstood
She let her lovely voice roam free
Through the stars and around the trees

Here Beren beheld her first
And named her Tinúviel, daughter of twilight, she kindled a thirst
She was beautiful, he knew that indeed
But their love was doomed not to be free

Tinúviel’s mortal love was soon betrayed
To Thingol, her father, and the king was shamed
From his throne he did decree
That for love a jewel must be stolen, one of three

A terrible task to steal these jewels
Wrought of the most wonderful tools
The journey would bring him to the gates of Morgoth
The dreadful foe of all that flew or walked

Thus Barahir’s son was caught in the oath
Which long ago Fëanor had spoke
And Beren took up this challenge swiftly
Even though as man his gained bliss would die quickly



Courtman14
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TOLKIEN POEMS (just wanted to post mine)

Post#2 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

just one more epic poem, this ones on the simirils

[u]Of The Jewels and the Darkening of the West[/u]

There was the day i’the depths of time
Filled with song and gay with rhyme
Before the Jewels, and their luster fine
When in the West the trees did shine.

And then, ere long, of Finwe’s tribe
Came he who had a fiery vibe:
Feanor he, the Noldor smith,
Who would craft the Jewels told of in myth.

Great were they, the Silmarils,
Gems of Light, with their own wills;
And when the work and toil was done
Glad was the heart of Finwe’s son.

But fiery still was Feanor’s heart,
And he trusted no other craft or art
But that of the forge, hot as he,
And the truth of the Valar he could not see.

And lo, there came a darkest of days,
Caused by they who love evil’s ways
And the mighty, bright trunks of Yavanna pure
Were felled to the ground for the hate they did lure.

A council was held at the Ring of Doom,
As Mandos pondered the fate that did loom.
Finwe’s son, discord’s seed
Shared not the Jewels to right the deed.

Yet as they spoke, Evil returned
To snatch the Jewels for which its heart burned,
And Feanor cursed it all as he might
In the dark, the eternal night.

Yavanna wept, the Valar said naught;
They seemed to have lost for what they had fought.
Now Mandos saw a future most violent,
But though his heart cried, he was silent.



nn[Edited on 5/5/2002 by Grondmaster]

Courtman14
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Post#3 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

revision: 1st stanza, 4th line: West instead of East

Grondmaster made the change for you.

You should have an edit button at the bottom of each of your previous posts; clicking on it will allow you to modify your own posts.nn[Edited on 5/5/2002 by Grondmaster]

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Allyssa
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Post#4 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

Wonderful Courtman, though I am no conniseur of poetry. I especially liked Feanor's "fiery vibe" :D

I also liked "Finwe's son, discord's seed". Very accurate. He certainly was an insrtument of discord.

I am afraid my ignorance of poetry makes me unable to criticise very constructlively.

Are there any more poets amongst us?
"May the Angels Guide"

Courtman14
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Post#5 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

c'mom give me some poems!

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Allyssa
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Post#6 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

I would courtman, but sadly :verysad: this is an artform that eludes me. *sigh*
"May the Angels Guide"

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PlasticSquirrel
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Post#7 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

I'm afraid my poetic license is now restricted to terribly offensive little rhymes that I'd get banned for posting these days.
http://www.plasticsquirrel.co.uk for all your bizarre music and musings needs

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Allyssa
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Post#8 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

HHmmmm...*gives Plastic a warning look.

Dont even think about it!!

Just curious Courtman, where does your sig come from?
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grondmaster
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Post#9 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

Perhaps to weigh
The choicest lay,
Whether to play
Or go away.

Were you to stay
Yet another day,
Mayhaps a yea
Would come your way.

:wink:
'Share and enjoy'

Courtman14
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Post#10 » Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am

HO! tis' me
Mr. Courtman14
Come back to the site
in the wee hours of the night

hello tuesday, hello all, at least someone posted some form of ryme, the site has significantly changed, huh, many moremembers I see. and my quote comes from a book by Kurt Vonnegut called Cats Cradle

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