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This is an interesting poem, Undale. Welcome to the Guild. Big Smile Smilie

If I may make a few suggestions to help its readability:


as I seatle in the house
wander through my mind
I find the cause of my confussion
in a world of questions
these lips can not answer.
As my mind wonders,
a voise whispers in the mysterious
and erase the thought
I have so long held on
and wondering why hold on
to this confussion as it grows
old when years pass by
so quickly these days.
So as the dark falls keep
the voice that warns the mind
of confusion and live at rest

But I know nothing about poetry, so feel free to ignore any or all of the above. Big Smile Smilie
Big Smile Smilie thank you for that suggestion! Smoke Smilie