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but its not LOTR related.

so just for critique,

Love You to the End

just because I apologize
that doesnt make youre pain depart
even when I didnt mean
to hurt you, I still did.

I loved you then
and I love you now
untill the end,
i will love youre smile
I didnt want to make you hurt
but bayb, I still did

I say I'm sorry,
I say it all
you look at me
and I dont see youre smile
It was there
but now its gone
I'll love you to the end

love you to the end.

that is the first song ive ever written. many of the words and lines are very debatable over which i should have put in.

please help me make it better!