Thread: The Watcher in the Water
One thing ’ Valedhelgwath uses the adverb ’slightly’ and I find that it weakens and qualifies the action. It is at odds with the sturdy characters presented. I doubt these Dwarves did anything slightly. But please take this as a featherweight criticism; the story works well.
It certainly captured my attention and interest. So many fanficts seem to be miles of snappy dialog and no action; no story. It’s like the postAuthorIDs hope if they keep the characters talking long enough, something will happen. Valedhelgwath uses real action and I enjoyed it immensely. I’m glad someone is writing about the Dwarves and I would like to see more of Valedhelgwath’s insight into their culture and characters. Good job! What’s next? Regards ’ Chathol-linn
What's next? Regards - Chathol-linn
You got any more Legolas stories for us?
[Edited on 7/10/2002 by Valedhelgwath]